This is my favorite kind of song to write, because it's imaginary characters in an imaginary story veiling something less easy to describe/emote. I also like to keep it ambiguous, because, though while I was writing it to a specific subject by the end (only marginally -- the song was mostly written before I realized what was in my subconscious), metaphors are just better when left unguided, in my opinion.
Also, there should be a word for the thing a metaphor represents. Metaphee? I dunno ... seems like a gap in language.
And while I hate to say it, I do hear echoes of "Black Balloon" and "3 AM" (songs that were popular right around the time I started learning to play guitar), so, without going too deep into where "originality" actually comes from anyway, I swear complete unintentionality there ...
I hope you like it! Let me know what you think, as usual. :)
Baby got her black coat on Left to catch her train and Changed her mind before she even boarded Baby got her black coat on Then she started to wander But wouldn't you know it was raining She bought an umbrella she could afford it Then she started to wander Can she see the time upon the Can she see the time upon the clock? Then she started to wonder Where she was ever aiming She felt so lost but she ignored it When she started to wonder Baby never talked to nobody Didn't want to seem complaining Ideas so scrambled thoughts distorted Baby never talked to nobody Hello there Can I help you find your way But she struggled To find the words to say OK Can't you see the time upon the Can't you see the time upon the clock? Baby got her black coat on Ain't no sense in changing She finally realized where she'd transported And why she couldn't see the time upon the clock